The Frozen Lake
Tommy was sitting on the edge of his bed, he decided to go on a walk to the lake. He walked out of his house to see frozen grass and snow scattered on the sidewalk. Tommy walked around to see frozen leafs scattered around the grass. While he was walking through the field he had dropped his key. He kept walking until he tracked the frozen lake. One he had got hole he realised he had dropped his key on the walk up. He had to wait for him mum to get home to open the door.
Ella
Greetings from Australia, and congratulations on your response to this week’s challenge. Your careful choice of vocabulary helped your readers to visualise the scene. I did feel sorry for Tommy when he had to wait for his mum to let him into the house because he had lost his key. Remember to re-read your text to check for punctuation, and meaning, before you publish. I enjoyed reading your writing.🙏😊
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